First Falsehood

[charaman]

How's this for a story for my game:
     An old man floats in space. BUt it was not always like this. He has been cursed to live forever beacause of an occurence that happened two hundred years ago. He is the Narrator of my story
     The man's name is Domisin. He previously lived in a world in which everone lived in bliss. on his fifth birthday, his mother dissappeared, and his father told her that she fell over the waterfall in the far south, while preparing his birthday present, a rowboat. when he was seventeen, his father, mayor of a small town, became very sick and was near death.  His sister called him to his father's bedside so the dying old man could tell him one last thing before he died: his mother lived, in an alter, sub-demonic state. And as soon as he released his lie, the man died and the string holding thisUtopian world froma demonic realm snapped. Dom's mother's anguish over her husbands death caused the world to split. Demons were born out of the earth, and superhumans from other dimensions came through cracks in space-time. Domisin and his sister Marissa tavel to the Ice mountains in the Great South to stop their mother.

Waddaya think? email me: mccheezee@aol.com or AIM me: lazyNtyrd

[charaman]

renew.. wil sum1 ust plz resond?


hey SMb this is 4 u

[FFL2and3rocks]

Sounds pretty good!  

[smokey_locs2002]

I like it.

[charaman]

thx about 5% done, but when its finished, ill post a dl link

[SaiKar]

You have not really told us a whole lot about the plot. The setup seems pretty good, but your description just kind of... ends. Why is this guy's mother a demon? What do the Ice Mountains have to do with anything? Why does every game have to have cracks in space/time?

I have no idea.

[charaman]

space time cracks: i belive i say that mother's anguish caused her to get mad and her rage went out

sorry but the rest is still in the works