Forsaken Twilight [Prayer of Peace] (RTP)

[Darkness5080]

ok people, havn't made a game for atleast a year, so i hope i'm not rusty ><

Story
The kingdom of Rossette is one of the most beautiful places in the world.  But one day a masked man shows up and a ancient power is released. (thats all i wanna tell for now ><)

The game is told through 4 peoples perspectives, meaning there is no one main character, sometimes the 4 stories intersect, but other than that your playing with 4 different people.

Gods (as told by the church)
basically all the games i'm realeasing have the same set of gods, if you've never played any of my other games heres the list of gods atm, we still have 2 missing because our writer is sick atm.

Udall - The grand Creator - The leader of the gods
"A star will run for its life, looking beyond its own burning flame. Though many will try and kill it in vane, nothing will ever be the same when it hits the earth, a giant grave. Everyone will remember the starlight running from its own beam. It will dream, drown, burn, run, and scream, but all will bow before its reign and they will all remember the name."
No one really knows where Udall came from, not even himself. It isn't even clear as to WHO he really is! However, one thing is clear: from him come the rest of the divine beings, who with their combined powers created the World.
 
Tresa & Bella - The twins - Godesses of passion and lust
One day, Udall was chasing another shooting star, and before he knew it, they were both flying towards the sun. Udall was so caught up in the hunt that he forgot to avoid the other sun, and he was burned to near death, but flew out of the sun to the cool service of his friend the moon. While soaking in some of the ice springs, his burnt bottom lip and right middle finger fell off with some of his blood. As they hit the water, the blood wrapped around Udall's flesh, and they started to grow. Before his eyes, Tresa of Passion and Bella of Lust appeared in the form of blonde twins engulfed in a golden cloud. They now travel in the sky, making new stars... where ever they can.
 
Ainakea - The destroyer - God of hate and wrath
Dabney was after another star, the same one as Udall, expect to kill it. Udall caught up with the star, and they both hid away in a meteor. However, as they were bonding, Dabney found them and stabbed the star through the back and into Udall's stomach. The blood from the star and the blood from Udall mixed together and soaked into the ground. After Dabney fled, Udall took the star's body, buried it, and left to mourn. After many days, the rays of the sun reached into the meterorite and hit the blood soaked ground. The blood started to boiling, and from the ground Ainakea, the god of hate and wrath, creeped out. As if knowing what had happened, he works side-by-side with Dabney to this day, trying to find the right moment to kill him.
 
A'ala - The wise - God of wisdom
One day, Udall was asked by his daughters, Tresa and Bella, which of them was the best woman. Unable to come up with a decision, even after meditating for 300 days, he desperately (and for the first time) created A'ala to answer his sister's questions. He did, saying that neither of them were the best woman, since they didn't have, or wanted, the qualities of a true wife and mother. In rage, the twins cursed that all things that were wise and smart would live hell one earth, less they were favored by them. To help counter it, A'ala declared that those who lived wisely would live the longest and most prosperous.
 
Zierkirsche - The plant - Godess of the harvest
 Many years after Yaacov and Eadith were born, Dabney was agitated that nothing had gained the title of death for the past five decades.  By this time, he was desperate to see his mother who was living at the end of the galaxy.  He couldn't kill anything before its time as he pleased anymore thanks to Eadith, and even if he was able to injure something, Yaacov would automatically heal it before it lost its life.  At the edge of killing the fraternal twins, he presented a challange to Eadith.  Dabney offered that if he, the god of death, could grow a live plant by midnight, Eadith would cut all things current life spans by half.  If he couldn't, then they would be doubled instead.  Knowing that that was impossible, Eadith accepted her oppossite's challange.  After failing about one billion times, Dabney begged his father Udall for help.  Understanding his pain, Udall summoned A'ala to help him grow the very first Amaranth.  After stealing a spickle of blood from all the gods and goddesses, some white star dust, a few strands of Eadith's hair and Tresa's hair, A'ala gave him a hand full of spring water from the moon.  Dabney planted the material on the old moon (which would belong to the World) and fed the soil the cool spring water.  When midnight was just around the corner, a pure white spectacurly beautiful flower grew, the Amaranth, but the bud had not fully blossomed.  A'ala predicted that Dabney's "daughter" would be born at midnight, and he left.  When time struck midnight, the bud grew and opened, revealing a full grown brunette gal with dim eyes.  All the divinities had at least one eye on Dabney and his progress.  Eadith admitted defeat and shortened all the living creatures' life span by half.  Dabney in great joy took over a thousand souls to his mother.  His sister then named her niece Zierkirsche, the godess of harvest, in charge in the multiplying of plants, and in case of an emergency, the animals as well.

 
Yaacov - The healer - God of healing
 Coming Soon!
 
Eadith - The life - Godess of all living things
 Coming Soon!
 
Dabney - The Death - God of death
Udall had spent most of his days with one of the best stars he had ever met. As she started to come upon her final days of life, Udall for the first time came to realize the harsh truth of mortal lifespans. He traveled across the sky to find Yaacov and Eadith, and he begged for them to lend their powers. Eadith said that all living things will eventually die, including the star. Her brother stated he could heal a person's soul that was split into many pieces and permanantly damaged by the firery wrath of his little brother, Ainakea, but there was, and is, no permanent remedy for aging. Udall, full of rage, attacked them, and they fled back to their birth places to recover.  After that, he calmed down and returned to his dying star.  As she took her last breath, Udall revealed himself in his full glory to her eyes, and her heart burned to stay with him.  Her soul barrowed some of his power, and when Udall returned to his shelled form, he saw and raised Dabney, the left over form of his "mother's" soul. From then on, Dabney takes those of the dead to the end of the galaxy for them to rest in peace so he can visit her.

(these gods were originally created for this game, but were using the same ones in our mmorpg ><)

Main Characters
? ? ? (The princess) - "She is the flower of her kingdom"  Not much is known about this character at the begining, but it seems theres more to this girl then meets the eye.

Drake (The theif) - drake grew up in the ghettos under Rossette.  Not to many people know or care about the place where he grew up.   Drake is pretty level headed and is very serious.  His partner is named Nala, shes the complete oposite of him, no one understands why they get along so well.

Rekz (? ? ?) - a young boy who grew up in the wood outside Rossette with his brother.  His brother works as a blacksmith in town.  Reks is very quiet and loves to read.  Theres always been something strange about him tho...

Sole (The bard) - Sole is a traveling bard.  He is very mellow and loves to sing.  He loves to live the carefree life being a bard has brought him. 

Screen shots







more info coming soon~

[Meiscool-2]

I'm pretty sure that this is the first VX game posted here.

As for "The game is told through 4 peoples perspectives, meaning there is no one main character, sometimes the 4 stories intersect, but other than that your playing with 4 different people." this can be very good if pulled off correctly. I'm concerend that you might be trying to make the game a little long by doing this, as more rpgmaker games that try to get to long end up failing, but other than that it sounds good.

[A Forgotten Legend]

Ok, first off, I know mapping is a bit hard in Vx, but from what I can tell, you maps seem really open.  Try adding trees/bushes/etc to liven them up.

Also, your first map there is a bit odd. I don't really get how it works.  I know you are trying to get that pic in the back, but the Ice tiles don't really look that good.  Also, to your walls, try adding some variation instead of just a straight line.

Its okay, but you should work a little more on that.


Story looks pretty thought out.  I'll take another look when I get the chance.