Original Musica by MrHawi & xSebax

[mrhawi]

 Hi, i want to show some music that me and a friend made, here are the "songs":


Aleggro Melancolico:

http://www.goear.com/listen/81fdd95/aleggro-melancolico-mrhawi-xsebax

Theme 2:

http://www.goear.com/listen/da20c8a/tema-2-xd-mrhawi-xsebax

Tema 5:

http://www.goear.com/listen/e330e88/tema-5-mrhawi-xsebax

Comments, critics, and suggestions are aprecciated, thanks in advance =).


P.S: Sorry for my bad english =(.

[A Forgotten Legend]

Alright, here goes.  Most of the first one is being picky about the name, so its kinda optional to look at. Haha.  I'm a music major, so that kind of stuff bothers me a little. XD

Aleggro Melancolico:

1. First, because its music, you you should probably use the Italian, Allegro Malinconico. (Or some other variation of the second word, but Allegro is pretty standard)
2. From the name, I understand its not a normal upbeat allegro, however, I'm getting it to be 60 = dotted quarter note.  Definitely not allegro.
3. It was pretty, although it could have used a little variation in the accompaniment, and seemed really repetitive and started to get slightly boring.
4. Overall, it was enjoyable, and I could see it being used as a town theme or something of the sort.

Theme 2:

1. Nice bass opening.
2. The string entrance was a little awkward, and the syncopation is cool, but it sometimes detracts from the melody at the beginning.  After the drum kicks in, it seems fine.
3. I really like when the piano comes in and it starts to all fit in nicely as you add in other instruments.

Theme 5:

1. Interesting opening.
2. The overall feel of this one is much easier to understand and feel.  The trumpet part is nice to listen to. (I love dissonance)
3. Piano interlude is pretty nice, and I feel like the phrases are the right length.
4. I'm liking the brass solo.  Although, dynamically I feel it needed more of a climax.
5. The final climax of the piece is nice, and I'd like to hear it orchestrated with better sounds.

There's my comments.  I hope you use them to help you.  I think adding some kind of dynamic contrasts between the rhythm/accompaniment sections and the melody will help as well.  Sometimes they were just a there a little too much.  Good job!

[mrhawi]

 Hi, thanks for the complete critic and suggestions =). the name "allegro melancolico" was choosed only for fun xD (we dont know much about music theory), the real name was "theme 1" xD, but is boring to have songs only with the name "theme "number". And yes, the sound quality isn't good, because we used edirol (FL) to made these mp3s. I guess thats all, thanks for your comments =) bye.

PS: Sorry, my english is not good, i hope that you can understand what i'm trying to say =).

[A Forgotten Legend]

Ha, your English is fine.  We can understand you pretty well.

I see.  Sorry about the name rant.  I understand about the audio quality, I was just saying that it'd be cool to hear. Haha. Your welcome though.

[mrhawi]

 i want to update this post with a new song, here is it:

Theme 6: http://www.goear.com/listen/3595f2d/tema-6-mrhawi-sebas

[AdamPickett5]

Hey it's OK with your English..It's fine..
An your composition is good too....I like the review on your song and I agree with it..

[mrhawi]

 thanks for the feedback, i want to show a new music that we composed (me and my friend), mabye this theme will be the "boss theme" of my game:

http://www.goear.com/listen/daf1c06/tema9-mrhawixsebax

please feel free to comment, critics and suggestions are aprecciated, =)