Tell if this is good or not

[Rikushinblade]

Well guys i would like to post the story of my game.  It was my brothers idea not mine so i just said i should just post it any way.
Well here it goes


                                           Tales Of Fate
                                                       By: Lifemaste2x
                                                     Produced by: Manasoft


  Anyways, the story begins when a soilder from Arigos named Marx is sent alongside his master Fuji (who taught him everything he knows), an ambassador of Arigos named Kraigen, and imperial soilders. Their ship lands on the green island known as Eria. From there things immediately turn for the worst. A situation occurs that splits all members. This is basically the intro and is REALLY vague. Don't assume this is the complete story because there is alot more to this story and believe me you can expect alot of plot twists and deep character development. The character development is what is going to add on and make the story so much more admirable. As it stands, there are 13 main characters.

Its the only part he though of stay tuned for more
 

[maxine]

well... Sounds pretty cool since its not a Cliché...

13 members?.. You will be able too play as all of them?..

Hmm screeenies would be good (Y).

[mind-master: brain(mmb)]

first of all, dont listen to the guy that posted above you.*cough*maxine*cough*

then second of all, it sounds litle cliché at the part
''then everything turns bad, and the party gets seperated''
tell your bro to fix that part, oh and as for the rest...
13 party members?! O_o thats allot u know...
a well... as for the rest, and of whast coming ill just wait:)

EDIT : the names are gooooood

[blackskullwarlock]

Seems good overall. Except for the title.....too many 'Tales' games for my liking...

[Ryoshin]

Is this a Tales-series fangame? just a thought. Oh, and it doesn't sound too bad.

[DragonBlaze]

Theres not much info to go by here, but your intro sounds good . 13 characters may be a lot, just make sure that they all interact and develope throughout the game

Good luck!