Trilogy

[PyroAlchemist]

I'm not going to quit FMA I just need a LOT more resources to do it. So until then I will work on this one. Read below.


STORY
Okay this is the story.

You are just a baby in a small village named Nazerin. There is a small chirp of crickets in the background and the glow of the moon shines on the village. Then a rustle comes through the peace as demon bandits creep through the grass. They aren't that big just a small hored of goblins. Then as if appearing out of the blue a huge demon called a Kisorn (Ki'zorn) Runs through the woods toward the village. The Kisorn is known to be a ruthless fire breathing demon that stops at nothing untill it gets what it wants or it dies. It plows through the goblins and then attacks the village. It eats all of the livestock and kills all the people except for an injured mother and her son. She goes as fast as she can to find a safe place. She comes upon a city and at the front are gaurds. The gaurds seeing how bad off she was knew that there was no way she could live. She begs them to take her baby to a place where he can grow and live in prosperity. The gaurds take the baby and the mother falls to the ground dead. After 17 years the boy named Jax starts to have vivid dreams. He sees his mother and all that has happened to his village. At first he thought that it was just a dream but the dreams became more clear and then he sees the look on his mothers face. A sad and hopeless look that shows nothing but pain and suffering. His mother then talks to him and tells of the pain and misery she has been through. He then decides to leave the village without a notice and search out the king of the demons.

CHARAS AND BIOS

Name:Jax
Age:17
Weapon:Sword
Bio: The boy from the story. Sharp minded and good with a sword he seeks out the king of demons to get retribution for his mothers death.

Name:Klange
Age:25
Weapon:Spear
Bio: A man who has a very short fuse. Though mostly skilled with a spear he has been known to use a bomb here and there.

Name:Jessie
Age:16
Weapon:Bow
Bio: A young girl whos parents were killed in a ship wreck leaving her on at home to fend for herself. Stealing only to survive she has been arrested many times. Quick with her bow and reflexes she is a valuable character.

Name:Vinsh
Age:??
Weapon:Hand
Bio: A half demon who wants to become fully human because he has been thrown out of towns and cities for what his father is. Not much else is known about him.

OTHER STUFF
Day Night with in game time
Reputation System 0_0 maybe knew I don't know
Random Weather
Bank System
Any other stuff that might be thought of.



Tell me what you think.    

Criticism welcome.

[drac9776]

I like the idea

The characters seem original. i hope to see some screenshots and char sets soon

[PyroAlchemist]

Well Jax is an original rtp but Klange Vinsh and Jessie I don't know yet I even made Jax some battle charsets. look here.

http://charas-project.net/forum/showthread.php?threadid=11912&forumid=6&catid=4

Those are him.

[drac9776]

Thats really good. Do you have any ideas for the other characters?

[PyroAlchemist]

Like what they look like and all?

[drac9776]

Like what features they should have and their personality

[PyroAlchemist]

Well I think that the descriptions above are clear but if more people ask then I will post more. As for the charas looks it goes like this.

Jessie
a dark green shirt, dark blue shorts, she uses a bow so a quiver on her back, short about on her neck hair that is blonde. she is white.

Klange
deep blue maybe navy blue shirt, light blue pants, bulky build of muscle, black hair, he is black.

Vinsh
Purple robe with the arms going over his, white hair, he is white.

After I make these or maybe someone makes em for me I will do the poses for them. Is that good enough?

[CoolZidane]

The story is a little bit cliche, but overall interesting. If you need music, I'll help out.

[PyroAlchemist]

Thanks Zidane and not to sound dumb but what does cliche mean?

[Bobb]

cliche means its not original and its kinda not original, but i think its good. I'll help if i can.

[PyroAlchemist]

well that just proves that I came up with it and not square. >_< And if you want to help can you make these charas?


Jessie
a dark green shirt, dark blue shorts, she uses a bow so a quiver on her back, short about on her neck hair that is blonde. she is white.

Klange
deep blue maybe navy blue shirt, light blue pants, bulky build of muscle, black hair, he is black.

Vinsh
Purple robe with the arms going over his, white hair, he is white.


Thanks.

[Bobb]

OK I'll get to work and probably get done tonight...or tommorrow.

[PyroAlchemist]

Thanks Bobb. Your always helping me.

[CoolZidane]

Mainly it's the thing of the hero going to kill the demon thing (I assume for revenge) that's a cliche. But if you present it right, it could be very interesting.

[Bobb]

What do you mean he has arms over his? I dont really understand.