Azure Frontier

[rush_fan]

Ok- hi everybody-  here is my game idea- it is bold, so i hope you guys like it- it's in a novel like form- its kindof the intro of the plot

its not historically acurate, but based on history( think alternate history)
***By the way, i had this idea earlier, (it was called Bloody Waters) but the name was already taken by a real game, plus i put more detail into the story.
Time Period: Pirate age

Charles Abbot was born in London and lived there all his life.  His mother was Spanish and his father was British.  He learned both languages quite well.  Soon, the new world was discovered and Britian and Spain began competing for land, along with the French and soon pirates joined the fight.  The caribbean was split among the three countries and the pirates.  Soon the French seemed to have a brutal advantage in battle, and things were becoming very rough for Britian and Spain.  Realising that they could not defeat France alone, they were about to join forces and major british and spainish governors were going to meet at a ball in Kingston.....

When the wars between Britian and its enemies became very intense, Charles was drafted into the military.  He liked the fighting but he hated the wigs and having to do everything his commanders said.  Heavy fighting in Europe between France and England broke out and Charles was cought in the crossfire.  After a few battles, the officers began to notice Charles skill in battle.  As soon as they realised that he spoke Spanish as well as English, they had bigger plans for him.  The caribbean became very essential because of the resources which they provided.  They decided that Charles should be one of the peace talkers with Spain.  Before Chaz knew it, he was shiped out to Kingston....

Chaz was somewhat excited about his promotion, but he wanted to fight again.  He sighed and went to the ball.  As he entered, he almost collapsed.  He became entranced and seduced by the woman slowly coming down the staircase.  She was very beautiful, mysterious and was wearing quite a revieling dress.  Charles could not think of anything else but her.  As the music started and people started dancing with their dates, the woman slowly glided towards Charles.  In a very sexy manner she held out her hand and Charles could barely reply. He quickly put his hand in hers and asked if she would like to dance.  She nodded and they were about to begin when a loud whistling could be heard.  "Get down" he yelled.  She stayed standing and said that it was the French.  As cannon fire was blasting in the background, French soldiers slammed throught the door and started to point their weapons.  Charles reached for his pistol holster but then everything went black....

Charles woke up and saw the woman.  She seemed to ignore him as he got off of the cold floor and noticed that they were in some kind of jail.  He looked at the windows, the bars, and even the small cot which they had been provided.  It seemed there was know escape.  As if  reading his mind, the woman responded "If you do exactly what i say, you might just come out of here with me."  He was startled by her responce. She went up to him and said, " I don't think i have introduced myself.  I am Aliella."  He put his hand out but she did nothing.  Then Charles said-  
"so, how the hell do you expect us to get out of here?"
"I have got many useful abilities which could help a human like you."
she responded.

Charles, know puzzled, didn't know what to say.  Then Aliella walked towards the bars where a French guard was standing.  She pulled his head back and before he could yell out, she covered his mouth with her hand and dug her now sharp teeth into his neck.  His body twitched as he was drained of life.  Charles was now very confused.  She then became transparent and walked right through the bars.  "Don't tell them what happened, and I will come back to help you."  Charles could not comprehend what just happened, and as she stared into his eyes, he collapsed again.  

He woke up to a hard slap to the face.  Charles realised that he was on a table.  A French officer was spitting in his face as he asked many questions: "Where is the woman?"
                           "What did she do to my men"
                           "What is her name!"
Charles stayed silent.  A heated rod was pressed among his chest.  He cried out in pain, but refused to talk.  Charles then stopped screaming and realised that someone else was.  One of the guards was pulled into the darkness and then went silent.  Then Aliella came out of the shadows. She crept behind the officer and then in what was a bloody mess, Charles watched in horror as the officer was literly ripped apart by nothing but her hands and her long sharp nails.  She pulled off thebraces holding him on the table and he got up.  "Well, I know that you can be trusted." She said as she carelessly wiped the blood off of her face.  "I'll explain later- as for now, lets get out of here".  She held out her hand and he was very cautious about holding her hand.  As soon as they tuched, Charles woke up in a bed.  He got up and went to the table where there was a note.
         Charles, you made one bloody mess at that party.  A Spanish governor was killed and many of the soldiers were massacred.  I am surprised you survived.  I need to see you at once.  Come down to the fort.
       Signed,
             Sergeant Turner


That is the begining of my plot idea.  How do you guys like it?  More details about the game itself later.  PLEASE be sure to say what you like and dislike- point out the major holes in my story. Thanks

[lAkirall]

yea it was pretty cool...maybe a few tweaks and turns their and here but it was a pretty good story.

[DragonBlaze]

Me likes

Yeah, I think you have a really good story so far, keep going with it.

[rush_fan]

Sorry to double post, but what do you guys think about my idea? Do you like it?  If there are parts you don't like, tell me what they are!
Thank you

[DragonBlaze]

Lol, yeah, double posting is bad. I think you're supposed to wait at least 24 hours before updating with a new post, and you're post wasn't really even an update.

Anyway.. I think what you have there is good and complex. However, if you reviel that information anytime before the middle of the game, I think its going to ruin it. As I was reading through the story, I was starting to wonder who that girl was, and it was building up suspence. Revieling information like that right away will destory the whole suspence aspect of it.

I don't know if you were  planning on telling the players that right away in the game or not, but I figured you were since you posted the info in this topic. Usually when people post info on their game, the only post info that is revieled near the start of their game.

[DragonBlaze]

Lol, you can't really have anything too exotic or too complex when making a game as long as you go reviel it in the right way. If something is really complex, you don't want to throw it all at the player at one time. This would probably work out the same way, ealier in the game, you would hint at 'her people' but never reviel that she is one of them. Then slowly tell the player her story in peices, or give enough hints to it that when you give it to the player, they won't get lost.

The key to it is how you present it.

So moving on, have you actually started working on this yet? If so, do you have any screens and such for it yet?

[rush_fan]

i'm working on getting it started- here are features that i hope to have-

8 direction movement
Zelda Project ABS (substituting arrows with muskets)
Sea battles- hard to figure out how i will do this
Land Battles- Fight along side British teamates

the problem is creating custom characters- i can make maps and all that, but i cant draw at ALL!

[chronoman]

Well this is justa thought but for the sea battles you could have it set up in a Fire emblem/Advanced wars style. You have the ship able to move so far every turn and aproach enemy ships. When it is in range you can use you cannons or for close-range you could have men board the ship and set up battles with set crew members or variation between what of your characters are on what ship. (Kind of like the beggeining of FF 3/6 with the moogles who help you protect Terra. (Though this is just a thought)

[rush_fan]

^^good idea

Well, thanks for supporting my idea guys

If someone wants to hlep me, i need it please- I need a good spriter for rpg maker xp to make charsets- pm me if interested...

[dinkler]

really like the story, pirate era is my favorite thing to study in history and it gives us a nice break from the medival time period games.the chick sounds awesome

[rush_fan]

OK!! I finally decided my name (thx Dragon!)

The game will now be called:  AZURE FRONTIER

I am ready to start a dev. team for it- with all the features i hope to include, i cant do it all by myself:

If you have any skills with Rpg Maker XP- scripting(NEEDED) spriting(NEEDED), mapping, music or story, I COULD USE YOUR HELP!  Speak up if you want to join the team!!!!!!

[Kasumi_Sakura]

That's amazing.  You defiently have something going.  Just hold unto it and grasp it with a reverse hook to a fishes' mouth.  You have promises, I like that.

[ZeroKirbyX]

Originally posted by rush_fan
OK!! I finally decided my name (thx Dragon!)

The game will now be called:  AZURE FRONTIER

I am ready to start a dev. team for it- with all the features i hope to include, i cant do it all by myself:

If you have any skills with Rpg Maker XP- scripting(NEEDED) spriting(NEEDED), mapping, music or story, I COULD USE YOUR HELP!  Speak up if you want to join the team!!!!!!

You had all this potential. Then what did you have to do? Ask for a team. Its really a shame. If your idea rests solely on others doing it for you the sign off from the idea now.

America now exists, but never went to war with Britian. They established a deal- If America sided with Britian (and gave them some resources) against France, they would be given their independance free of taxation. America accepted and is now on the alliance with Britian, and soon to be Spain. Italy, Germany, Portugaul, and many other european countries have joined the alliance all to fight france- who is slowly taking over the world. Frances leader?

If you knew ANYTHING about history, this would NEVER HAPPEN! EVAR! Especially if the colonies had to forfeit resources to the ones who they were trying to escape. And especially when the mother country would do anything to keep them. At lesat make it so that the 13 Colonies remained colonies under Britain. Remained taxed, remained under British rule, and the Brits conquered North America. Then you have an actual reason for France to go to war against Britain. They feared its power.

[rush_fan]

With the history, i see your point...America will stay the 13 colonies of england.....
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2nd, however , a team is needed to create a spectacular game.  Most think that they can create a game with rpg maker all by themselves.  Few of them can(and those who can shall be worshiped) but most of us cant create a story, sprite for it, script it, map it, and do it independently.  With all of the features i hope to include, i can't do it by myself- than i would let all of those who enjoyed my story down thanks to shity gameplay.  This is why I need a team- people who can join the cause- it would be OUR game.  I don't expect people to make resources for me, i expect them to join the team and make them for OUR game- thats how real game developers do it!  Then again, i respect your opinion and honestly have no power compared to you(compare our post counts XD)  all i am saying is that if you WANT to be a part of this game, sign up.  Thanks for the constructive critisism

[AsakuraHao2004]

I read it... first thing... pirate age? Pirates have existed for as long as ships have, and pirates still do exist.  Now if you mean the steriotypical swashbucklers, that's too broad a time period to actually have a continuous plot based on it. Anywhere from the 1500s - 1700s I believe. Also, you said you were replacing arrows with muskets, but I'd use slightly more modernized rifles. Even though muskets are 15th century, the would have evolved somewhat by your time period.

Other than that its ok... the chick's kind of ...hmm.... I dont wanna say clichee... I think it adds  little bit of outlandishness to the story. But that's just my opinon. Overall it's pretty good.

Edit, didnt seee last post: If america is a Brittish colony at this time you definatly want to use modernized rifles of the 1700s.